I hope everyone is having a great week so far. Friday fictioneers by Rochelle is on and cracking (I have always wanted to say that, lol). This week’s picture is also courtesy of our host, Rochelle.
The photo prompt this week had something poetic about it, at least to me. I tried to write a short story but it reads as a poem in my opinion, so instead I am offering two poems. Please feel free to comment, and leave constructive criticisms…I really do appreciate them. And you are welcome to join in and participate. THANK YOU!
Image courtesy of Rochell Wisoff-Fields
I. A POETIC MOMENT
A poetic moment richly crafted in this window sill
Ice adorning cold glass frame like heavy lace stitching
Nature’s Christmas day décor
Golden bulbs reflecting bright light
From within
A pseudo sun
In December’s gloomy freeze
II. FROZEN (WINTER’S ICE)
In the unquiet of my world
I stay frozen
Winter’s ice on the window of my soul
Once tender, now ice cold stone
My eyes recognize nothing
Unloved they remain
Yet without disdain
They stay transfixed in this season
Cold and lonely without hope
Beauty stands no chance
Forever going on unseen
Springs’s rebirth a myth
In this heart and eyes
Frozen with and over time
Both are wonderful, Boomie.
Thank you so much
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Enjoyed this!
Very glad to know sir
. Thank you
I enjoyed them both very much!
Always nice to hear that, thanks so much
Both beautiful, but I absolutely LOVE the second one. “Springs’s rebirth a myth – In this heart and eyes – Frozen with and over time” Love!
Thanks so much Lily, and to think i almost didn’t share the second one
The second one is so poignant.. but I loved them both:)
I really appreciate it…i almost didn’t share the second one. So glad i did
“if winter comes, can spring be far behind ??”
though it has got a blue side 
different from your previous poems.
Liked the second one very much
Absolutely!!! Yet sometimes when one is afflicted, hope seems like such a distant thing, at best a myth…but i agree after winter regardless of how dark and somber, spring in all its beauty still comes
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Thanks so much
Wonderful! I agree that both are wonderful. And there is something about the second I love:
“Beauty stands no chance
Forever going on unseen.”
Nice double.
Thanks so much Uzoma, i think the second one is the poular one this week, so glad i shared it.
You never disappoint Boomie…both wonderfully written.
And you are always so gracious to me
. Thank you so much, i am truly blessed to “know” you, thanks so much
Beautiful, just beautiful. Saw some frost painting my windows this morning.
Those things are like poems in the making lol, thanks so much sis
Wonderful poems, Boomie. but I am in love with the second one. Well done. I am out thsi week too, because of poor connectivity and other reasons. I will be coming out shortly on those reasons.:-)
I hope all is well. Thanks so much, sending love
Both so very different. One brings cheer & another sadness.
Although chilly – I feel warmth in the 1st one.
As always – you done gooooooooood!
Thanks twinnie, we sure are blood…i was feeling the first one more too, but glad they both worked well.
Lovely! Didn’t notice the ‘pseudo sun’ till after I read your poem
Smiles, thank you
The second resonated with me more
FWIW Kim*
http://www.100days100ways.wordpress.com
Thanks so much Kim
It wall all good, but I found this, “In the unquiet of my world
I stay frozen,” a powerful description of emotions many of us have dealt with.
Oh so true. Thanks so much
Wonderful, Boomie
Always nice to hear from you, thanks so much
Dear Boomie,
I enjoyed both poems. However I found the first to be a nice little narrative while the second brought tears. It’s very close to the poem I wrote 20 years ago that inspired my story. I hope this poem isn’t true for you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Oh thanks so much. Not really, i think the words just fell out, but there have been times that i have felt this way.
Thanks so much
Hi Boomie,
You turned the photo into a beautiful extended metaphor for the longing of the human heart! Ron
Thanks so much. I am so glad you enjoyed this
Lovely poems, Boomie.
Thanks so much as always
Your words fit perfectly together. Beautiful.
Very nice of you to say, thanks so much
I also saw lace in the picture. I almost went that direction in my story as well. I enjoyednyournpoetry this morning!
Mine is here : http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/11/08/flash-friday-fiction-15/
Thanks so much. I absolutely loved yours… The description, the undertone, very well done
They are both nice, but the 2nd poem resonated more with me.
Thank you sir
The second one resonated so well with my November melancholy. I want to hibernate until we have a verdant spring.
Me too. The weather just makes everything so blue
Your photo and your words so pretty. Ice on the window feels warm inside.
Thanks so much Yumi
Absolutely beautiful, Boomie. I think both of these are some of your best work. I especially liked ice as a “lace stitching,” and December’s pseudo sun in the gloomy freeze. Really nice.
Thank you so much. I am so partial to the first one as well, but glad both worked well. You are ever so kind to me, thanks so much. Warm hugs
Very beautiful!
I do so enjoy reading whatever you write.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2012/11/09/friday-fictioneers-1182012/
Thank you so much sir
Dear Boomie,
Two for the price of one. loevd them both.
Aloha,
Doug
I love the rhythm of “Christmas day decor.” It’s like a little dance. And Spring’s rebirth a myth / In this heart and eyes” really rings true. Good job!
Thanks so much CIndy
Nice poems. I especially like No. 2: “Beauty stands no chance…”
I think no 2 is a winner this week. Thsnks so much
Awesome job. I liked the second one best also, although I enjoyed both.
Thank you so much.
Boomie,
Sorry it took so long to get here…It’s been a crazy couple of weeks with Sandy The Super Storm. I have another name for her but I’ll keep it to myself.
“My eyes recognize nothing
Unloved they remain
Yet without disdain
They stay transfixed in this season
Cold and lonely without hope”….seems to me to be the heart of poem #2, smack square in the middle where it belongs….and I love the last line “frozen with and over time” a perfect change in rhythm… it brings the whole poem to a nice halt. Lovely young lady just lovely!
Tom
Oh not at all. I am so sorry about the Sandy, and i dont blame you if you have another name for it. I really do hope things get sorted out soon…glad you are alright in the alive sense of things.
Thanks so much for stopping by to read, and commenting i really appreciate it. It’s amazing that the second one is the popular one this week, and to think i almost didn’t share it because i wasn’t sure about it. I am glad we do this fictioneer thing, it sure is helping my confidence.
Have a great, great week. Thanks so much again for stopping by. God bless
Nice job Boomie. Loved the first one best.
Thanks so much. I think i am partial to the first one as well
This blog is so welcoming bright a lot to check out thank you i will be back
Thank you so much, will be over at yours too to show some love
thank you have a nice day!