Happy New year!!! Friday fictioneers par Ms. Rochelle is on again, and this week’s picture is courtesy of Lora Mitchell. We have been told to specify what genre we write, but I am clueless in that regard, however if anyone has an idea what the genre is, please feel free to point it out.
This week I am offering a short fictional story, and a poem…comments, and constructive criticisms are sincerely appreciated. Please feel free to join in and participate. Thank you always, have a great year!!!
Image courtesy of Lora Mitchell
MY COUSIN’S WEDDING
My cousin’s wedding was an extravagant carnival. The only child of her wealthy parents, books of check were autographed to celebrate her union to her fiancé of 6 weeks.
The reception was filled with foods from all over the world; champagne flowed free like the River Nile. The plutocrats and silk stockings were in attendance. It was an event to behold…and after much eating and drinking, we were entertained by fire breathers and dancers who rolled and twisted to the music of Africa’s greatest voices…The long night ended with amazing fireworks…
Interestingly so did the marriage…
POEM- SPARKS FLY HIGH
Brilliant sparks fly high
In a brief moment of passion and intensity
Blue and pink hues of desire dancing across dark city skies
Love soundly reflected in two bright eyes wildly burning free
god- like beings colliding as night falls
i like the six weeks mention. nice sense of foreshadowing. thanks for sharing.
Thanks so much for stopping by
wow talk about an extravagant wedding! and i thought my plans were too much.lol ^^
lol…thanks kz
I don’t remember the fireworks during my wedding, or the wedding reception, but there were plenty fireworks afterwards. Those fireworks are still looking me in the face at this very moment as they wait for dinner. I love your writings.
Shenine
Thanks so much Shenine.
Hmmm I wouldn’t classify you story as romance, maybe general fiction? Good story though. I love the poem.
Thanks so much. I need to read up on the genre classifications no doubt.
Nice story…, and I love the poem.
Thank you Boomie.
Love,
mei
Always very nice to hear from you Mei, thanks so much
Love the last two lines of the story!
Very nice of you to say sir
Story & Poem – Both full of BANG!
Thanks twinnie
Fiancé of 6 weeks… I knew this wasn’t going to go well. Loved the way you ended your story. Nice poem too.
Thank you so much…in my humble opinion 6 weeks is quite short.
Same here, but I loved the way you ended it Boomie.
Very good!
Thanks so much Abraham
I loved it, Boomie. Both the poem and story. I guess even a grand celebration can’t save a marriage. That’s too bad.
Yep…too bad. Thanks so much
Happy New Year!! You’ve been nominated for the Gargie Award =)
I hope you will accept this small token of appreciation for your amazing talent!
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Thank you so much for this kind nomination. Very much appreciated!
Loved both the story and the poem. Very well done!
Thank you so much
Great story. It seems indicative of a lot of high-profile weddings. 6-weeks isn’t enough time to get to know someone.
Absolutely…although some will argue otherwise. Thanks David
High profile weddings often end like that. I iove the poem.
I’m off this week as I am preparing for a meeting.
They sure do…thanks so much. Have a great weekend
Start as you mean to go on … I guess. Nice one.
So true
. Thank you
“god- like beings colliding as night falls” I got a beautifully strange sensation and visual out of this! Great story and poem, have a beautiful Friday!
Thanks so much, and you too my dear.
Very neat. Having seen the River Nile, I presume “the champagne flowed like the River Nile” means “at times there was a lot of it flowing, indeed overflowing, but at other times not much; and it flowed between vast dry areas.” Of course, it could also mean there were crocodiles in it or other even less healthy things…
Lol. I honestly switched it to the River Nile at the last minute..i initially had River Niger but didn’t think it would be as well known as the Nile…
It sure would be cool to see it
. Thanks Simon
Very good! I watched “500 Days of Summer” last night. This made me think of it.
Scott
Oh nice, i have never seen it…is it any good? Might check it out..Thanks
Nice story especially the added “boomie” humor…
Double smiles, thanks much
Sounds memorable on so many levels! Happy New Year to you and your beautiful family, Boomie.
Elisa
Thanks so much. The same to you and yours. God bless
Hi Boomie,
Fireworks are such a good metaphor for the passion of a relationship, and the fact that passion fizzles just about as fast sometimes. Six weeks may not be a long enough courtship! Ron
Thanks so much
no expense was spared…. The high and mighty
these two phrases are too common. i know you can rewrite them in ways that nobody else ever has before. that’s part of our job – to write things differently than they have already been written. if we can’t do that, then we may as well just read what other people have already written instead of what you have written that’s new. think about another way to say these things. i know you can do it.
Thank you so much… Will work on changing that.
If any suggestions cone to mind, please share
no expense was spared – maybe refer to a bottomless wallet or bottomless bank account. they wrote check after check. signed checks like signing autographs.
Ok…i was think deep pockets…or plutocrats for the high and mighty…
they can work. sure.
Thank you so much
nothing to thank me for. it’s what this is about.
You are so very talented…thanks for sharing!
Thank you so much
Sounds like quite an extravaganza!! Glad I wasn’t footing the bill for that wedding.
lol…thanks so much
You build the atmosphere well, so we’re dreading but at the same time expecting the conclusion. Nicely done.
Thank you so much
Pretty interesting story and poem!
Rahul
Thanks so much Rahul
Six weeks? Yikes. Great story!
I know right…too short. Thanks so much
I love the poem. It reminds me that all that glitters isn’t gold, or all that sparkles isn’t precious gems.
So true, thanks so much Resa. How are you enjoying the new year?
I”m enjoying the new year feeling very fortunate. I hit the ground running on Jan. 2, designing the costumes for a TV series Pilot, and I’m working on my 3rd “Art Gown”.
Thanks for asking! How’s the new year for you?
I loved ‘the plutocrats and silk stockings’ and thought your ending was just perfect. Great job.
I have to give credit to Rich for helping me find better and choice words. Thanks so much
Kind of saw that coming
The poem is brilliant!
Thanks so much
Love the end. Sad how so many beautiful weddings end this way.
Indeed so sad… Sometimes there is more emphasis on the wedding and all its glamour than on the marriage where the real work is.
Thank you!!!
True.
Very nice Boomie. the last line of your story changed everything.
Nice poem too!
Brilliant poem. Relationship that short only equals lust…often times if not always.
You are absolutely right…thanks so much Abby