Jan31

Getting Rich Quick-Friday Fictioneers 2/1

Posted on January 31, 2013 by boomiebol

Hello everyone! It’s that time of the week again, Friday fictioneers courtesy of Rochelle, with picture from Claire Fuller. I missed last week, even though I had a story and poem…life is well life these days. I took this week’s image back to native Yoruba land, please feel free to comment, give constructive criticisms, and as always join in the fun. THANKS FOR ALWAYS STOPPING BY.

Image courtesy of Claire Fuller

Ade stared at the herbalist who had laid his cowries, beads, and other incantations down on the muddy floor. In front of the 69year old man was a double headed statue…Orişa funfun…this was the god that would make him rich the herbalist had promised.

Chanting away in gibberish to conjure the image, Ade let his mind wander…Akin, his best friend had referred him to the herbalist after life dealt him another blow, and he lost his wife to the landlord…The herbalist was Akin’s source of millions…

Ade continued to fantasize when suddenly he heard a strange voice…the statue was alive…

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nightlake on January 31, 2013 at 12:37 am said:

lol. Ade would have been so shocked..a nice one, Boomie

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:52 pm said:
  
  I bet he was lol. Thanks so much
  
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Treasure on January 31, 2013 at 12:45 am said:

The statue has wig on it. Was it crying out justice?

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:53 pm said:
  
  Interesting way to look at it
  
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yerpirate on January 31, 2013 at 1:13 am said:

Nice penning..the story also comes alive

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:52 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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  - yerpirate on February 7, 2013 at 4:57 am said:
    
    PS..IF you’re interested….http://ligoeditions.wordpress.com/2013/02/07/the-ligo-haibun-challenge-prompt-melt/
  - boomiebol on February 7, 2013 at 7:06 pm said:
    
    Thank you!!! Will check it out this weekend
muZer on January 31, 2013 at 2:28 am said:

OMG.. That would’ve been such a shocker for Ade.. And scary too,, I guess. Nice story.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:55 pm said:
  
  OMG is right, but i am thinking if he was bold enough to go to an herbalist, he better be able to deal with whatever he experiences lol. Thanks so much
  
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Sandra on January 31, 2013 at 3:11 am said:

An intriguing hook – nicely done.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:46 pm said:
  
  Very nice of you to say. Thank you so much
  
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rochellewisoff on January 31, 2013 at 3:39 am said:

I’d be outta there! Nice one, Boomie.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:45 pm said:
  
  Haha me too . Thank you so much
  
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Seyi sandra on January 31, 2013 at 4:46 am said:

Beautiful Boomie! It’s neatly written and very apt.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:45 pm said:
  
  You rock sis . Thanks
  
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claireful on January 31, 2013 at 7:25 am said:

I wasn’t expecting that at the end…

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:42 pm said:
  
  Thanks Claire.
  
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readinpleasure on January 31, 2013 at 10:06 am said:

I sould love to see the look on Ade’s face. Nicely done.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:42 pm said:
  
  Hahaha!!! Thanks
  
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Resa McConaghy on January 31, 2013 at 10:39 am said:

With a 2 headed statue that can talk, Ade will make millions!

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:42 pm said:
  
  Haha love it . So true
  
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  - Resa McConaghy on February 1, 2013 at 7:10 pm said:
Parul on January 31, 2013 at 1:15 pm said:

That could be a spooky experience! Well done!

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:41 pm said:
  
  I agree . Thanks so much
  
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silentlyheardonce on January 31, 2013 at 1:23 pm said:

HaHa!! I would be out there in flash. Nice Boomie.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:41 pm said:
  
  I know right lol. Me too
  
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train-whistle on January 31, 2013 at 4:36 pm said:

love your character’s names and the surprise ending to this story.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:39 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much! They are Yoruba names
  
  Ade means crown
  Akin means warrior
  
  They are typically masculine names, but Ade can go both ways
  
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deanabo on January 31, 2013 at 4:53 pm said:

Nice! i enjoyed this one.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:38 pm said:
  
  I’m very glad . Thank you
  
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sustainabilitea on January 31, 2013 at 6:44 pm said:

That would certainly get his attention!! I can understand why the man is making lots of money.

janet

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:38 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much .
  
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Swirling Turnip on January 31, 2013 at 7:42 pm said:

Creepy! Not sure if being “alive” will turn out well for Ade or not. Left me wanting more.

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:37 pm said:
  
  Yea usually it becomes disastrous in the end…
  
  Thanks so much
  
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pennycoho on January 31, 2013 at 10:06 pm said:

Gosh I loved this, I didn’t expect the ending boomie (I knew it’d be good though) but you surprised me and I’m not easily surprised. On another note I just wanted to tell you again that you are admired as a woman. I know your responsibilities are numerous (and I’m sure many more than come to my mind) for you to continue to allow yourself just this small piece of creative “piece-of-mind”, that you do for yourself is awesome and I know (for a fact) very hard to do. Blessing, and take care of yourself! Penny (no need to respond my friend)

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:37 pm said:
  
  How can I not respond to this beautiful comment. It’s been so busy this year more so this past few weeks. I’m back working, the girls have so many activities and life is just busy lol.
  
  Trying to take it all one day at a time and haven’t written as much as I would like. I’m hoping tomorrow u can steal sometime to workout and write lol… I’m rambling… Sorry .
  
  Thanks always and always
  
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  - pennycoho on February 1, 2013 at 8:49 pm said:
    
    (I’m smiling) – go have fun with your family!
waitingforaname on January 31, 2013 at 10:17 pm said:

Yeah, that would be startling.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:56 pm said:
  
  Absolutely
  
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RoSy on January 31, 2013 at 10:22 pm said:

Great – I read this just before bed. Will I have nightmares now of talking statue heads?

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:34 pm said:
  
  Oh no… I hope not .
  
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Charles Oyeleke Williams on February 1, 2013 at 7:39 am said:

hahaha! Sister, you got me there…was thinking the herbalist would turn against Ade as we know now in Nigeria…quite a surprise at the end though!

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:34 pm said:
  
  Lol!!! Thanks so much
  
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kindredspirit23 on February 1, 2013 at 8:27 am said:

Ohh, time for wealth and ,,, revenge?
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/01/31/3636/

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:33 pm said:
  
  I think so . Thanks so much
  
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themisanthropicmuse on February 1, 2013 at 9:23 am said:

“Ade continued to fantasize when suddenly he heard a strange voice…the statue was alive…” Ack! Must. Know. More.

Fantastically penned. I loved this piece from start to finish. I am left wanting more.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:24 pm said:
  
  I am very glad, thanks so much.
  
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Tom Poet on February 1, 2013 at 1:03 pm said:

NIcely done. Well written and a shocker as well.

Tom

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:31 pm said:
  
  Thanks Tom
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on February 1, 2013 at 2:17 pm said:

Eerie and stark. You never fail

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- boomiebol on February 1, 2013 at 6:29 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much
  
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t on February 1, 2013 at 3:01 pm said:

Nice…!

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:24 pm said:
  
  Thanks
  
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The Bumble Files on February 1, 2013 at 10:20 pm said:

Very complex and eerie. Nice Boomie!

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- boomiebol on February 11, 2013 at 10:08 pm said:
  
  Thanks
  
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dmmacilroy on February 2, 2013 at 4:15 am said:

Dear Boomie,

Nice to see you incorporating scenes from your world into your work.

Aloha,

Doug

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- boomiebol on February 11, 2013 at 10:08 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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annisik51 on February 2, 2013 at 5:41 am said:

The invocation went awry? He wanted money, not a live statue. I’m wondering what happens next – a sign of an excellent story.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:20 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much…perhaps the statue needed to pass a message or some rules on to him before opening the vault of wealth…Glad you enjoyed this
  
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Sarah Ann on February 2, 2013 at 8:35 am said:

And what happens next? So many images and so much more to learn. Love it.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 9:42 am said:
  
  Thanks so much Sarah Ann. So many possibilities with this, glad you enjoyed it
  
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lingeringvisions on February 2, 2013 at 2:07 pm said:

Sounds like the herbalist had some pretty good herbs to me.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:14 pm said:
  
  I know . Thanks so much for stopping by
  
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newpillowbook on February 2, 2013 at 2:15 pm said:

Oh my – what happens next?? Will Ade get what he wants, or will something awful happen? You hooked me with this one – good beginning, but please give us more!

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:59 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much. I believe he will, as usually is the case, but there will be a steep price to pay no doubt. Will the price be worth whatever fortune he is about to make though?
  
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Joe Owens on February 2, 2013 at 5:59 pm said:

Ade hits the jackpot as the statue goes all wonky and works some mystical magic. You never know what the herbalist has in their pile of potions.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:12 pm said:
  
  Exactly…though the same power they have to do “perceived” good is also reserved for their ill. Thanks so much for stopping by
  
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Shirley McCann on February 2, 2013 at 8:30 pm said:

Nice twist ending. Didn’t expect that.

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:08 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much, i honestly had no idea where i was going with the story when i started it.
  
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elmowrites on February 2, 2013 at 10:09 pm said:

Hi boomie! This feels like the beginning of something much longer – as Sandra says, a good hook. I found the middle paragraph a bit confusing – if this becomes a novel intro, I’d suggest lengthening that out a bit. But with 100 words, you certainly packed it in!

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:01 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much. It’s often so tough to get everything out in 100 words but we try i guess
  
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David Stewart on February 3, 2013 at 7:45 pm said:

Of course, now we’re all wondering what will happen next. The thing about flash fiction, though, is that the reader has to add in the extra details himself. I’m curious though: what do you picture happening next?

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- boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:47 pm said:
  
  i know. well considering that this scenario is somewhat common in some parts of the world…the money probably comes for Ade…but you know whoever dines with the Devil must be ready to pay the price…
  
  It can go so many ways but it often ends up disastrous
  
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  - David Stewart on February 3, 2013 at 7:52 pm said:
    
    Yeah, that would be a good assumption. This is really a tip-of-the-iceberg sort of story: you could write a whole novel about this.
  - boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 7:54 pm said:
    
    You flatter me David. My college professors said i get wordy in my essays, so i steer away from long tales as much as i can…such a shame i still have their criticisms nagging at me after all these years lol.
  - David Stewart on February 3, 2013 at 8:01 pm said:
    
    Criticisms can stay with us a long time, I know. Still wordy is not a bad thing if the words are good, as yours invariably are. I’d read a novel you wrote
  - boomiebol on February 3, 2013 at 8:02 pm said:
    
    Thanks so much. A wide smile on my fat face
Linda Parkinson-Hardman on February 5, 2013 at 6:23 am said:

I’m not surprised he was surprised, I think we’d all be if a statue started talking to us, the only question now, is what did the statue say? Loved it.

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- boomiebol on February 11, 2013 at 9:47 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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rich on February 6, 2013 at 8:38 am said:

alive? uh oh. well done.

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- boomiebol on February 7, 2013 at 7:13 pm said:
  
  Thank you sir
  
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timkeen40 on February 10, 2013 at 5:56 pm said:

Very nicely done.

Tim

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- boomiebol on February 11, 2013 at 9:09 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much for saying
  
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