Every Wednesday visit Madison Wood’s site to see the picture prompt for the week’s 100-word writing challenge. Write a 100-word story or poem that’s inspired by the picture. Post the writing on your blog. On Friday post a link to your blog entry in the comments section of her Friday Fictioneers post.
So after my first attempt last Friday, I decided to do another one. As usual please let me know what you think, and feel free to join in.
Andrea loved playing hide and seek, but this was getting scary. Her uncle Tim was being strange again, he had been once before and smacked her. Andrea never told her mommy because he had threatened to hurt them.
“I don’t want to play anymore, the woods are scaring me.” She cried “Can we go home now?”
“Just a little further” Tim replied, Andrea wanted her mommy and started to scream in panic, something felt wrong and she was scared…
Allison woke up drenched…she reached for her phone and dialed officer Watts…”I know where my daughter is…”
Boomie Bol 
Scary…
Yea!!!
Powerful! I could feel the terror in both the child and the mother! Well done! Mine is here: http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/fridat-fictioneers/
Thank you, enjoyed yours 🙂
Wow! Great sense of urgency on the part of the child and mother. Well done. I hope the call is in time to save the little girl.
Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
Thank you for stopping by and i enjoyed reading yours
chills…
Thank you…
Ah! I’ve got a huge smile! Not that I like creepy uncles or nothing…, but the story comes together perfectly. This is very different for you… Tells a huge story in so little words. And you leave nothing out. Good job! Love it!
Thank you Nifti…I really appreciate this comment. When I saw the picture, dreams came into my mind :). Glad it worked out. Hugs
Icky! A well-done icky nonetheless!
Yea scary icky :(. Thank you
A new mistress of the reality horror story! Bravo Bravo. Excellent!
Thank you
This is such a gripping story. A mother’s connection with her child is amazing and spiritual for some like me….
So true, I agree. Thanks for stopping by to read this 🙂
Not a pleasant thought but very much a reality as know from watching the evening news. If only we could all be that intuitive to solve life’s mysteries. Thank you for the thought-provoking post.
Thank you taking time to read it…yes it’s very unpleasant and all too real.
wow, nice – this is a great story…
http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-do-not-follow-me-home/
Thank you for stopping by, just read yours 🙂
Simply, a beautiful tale to start my day.
Wow…thank you very much
OMG this is wonderful Boomie i so love thrillers..you made my day
hugs ….big ones 🙂
As you have made mine Soma…bigger hugs :). Have a wonderful weekend!!!
A fine story, full of suspense. The themes of abuse and murder were stated without overdoing it. A touch of clairvoyancy added for good measure. Well done, Boomie. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/15/fridayfictioneers-sacrilege/
Thank you, gald you enjoyed it. Just stopped by yours 🙂
Scarily authentic, and I too hope it ends well for little Andrea. Thanks for your comment on ours!
http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/expect-the-unexpected
Yea I hope so too…it’s too scary to think otherwise. Thanks for stopping by mine :). Have a very pleasant Friday and weekend!
Thank you – you, too!
This is very good, Boomie! 😀 It hits the emotion it’s aiming for. You really are a versatile writer!
Hey you…i was just leaving a comment on your post :). Thank you so much :)…I am blushing under my very dark skin lol. How is you?
Hahaha! Me is fine, just a little busy with studies, but I can’t leave blogging altogether y’know. There’s so much yet to discover. I see though that you’re getting better with every new post you make. Yay!
Thank you so much :). I appreciate that, glad you are doing great and kicking studies in its big behind :). Yea, I am sure you can manage both quite well. Hugs me dear and have a lovely weekend!!!
Nice twist at the end. I only wish Allison’s name/association with the girl had been inserted earlier so I didn’t get a jolt of confusion trying to figure out who she was. Or maybe a separation line would work right before the Allison sentence. Anyway, great job! (And let’s hope Uncle Tim gets what he deserves.)
I’m on the link system, or here:
http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/06/14/friday-flash-fiction-hot-water/
Oh will work on that…thanks. Will check yours out now, many thanks for stopping by 🙂
Very powerful story in so few words.
Mine is here: http://wp.me/p1Wqon-aA
Definitely evokes strong emotions ! Its amazing how you just did that with so few words. I also find it funny how mind just fills in the rest of the “story” !
Thank you so much for saying so. It’s an all too familiar and very unfortunate story…always on the news and in the papers. So I figured just painting the picture will help readers grasp the rest of the story. now its time to go and pound the pavement :).
Have fun !
Thank you 🙂
Eerie. Wish you could have tied up all the loose ends there.
I want to know how this ends.
Mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/15/six-oclock/
Yea, but with 100 words this is what i could do…i guess it’s up to the readers how they want it to end…it’s an all too familiar story though
Wow. Very eerie. I liked it. Makes me want more!
Mine: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/15/friday-fictioneers-6152012-the-watcher/
Thank you, just read yours too, felt scared for the lady 🙂
Gave me chills! A scary feeling.
Huber scary
I hope Uncle Tim and the daughter are rescued. See, I believe the story was based in 1950s. Hitting was a more common practice at the time, so I don’t put much thought into that. What I do fear is that Uncle Tim developed a mental disorder from his time in WWII. He gets flashbacks and goes pouncing through the woods as if he can navigate through it all. It is a common misconception that he experiences often. The mother realizes this and calls in before they travel too far and are lost, or worse.
All these other people hating on Uncle Tim…They don’t even know. He is a victim of the times.
Oh my you are so crazy it’s good. lol, you have me holding my tummy in here from lauging so hard…I like your take on this one lol…I am reading the comment again and i can’t control the laughs…thank you sir!!!
Wow mistery I really love it, I would love to know what happens. I don’t know why but it makes me think of a book called Lonely Bones, I read that before it even became a movie or it was popular and it has that sort of cold, scary tone to it and I love it because I could not put it doing. I love how you work with the whole thing.
Thank you so much for stopping by. Never heard of the book but will check it out on amazon.
You are very welcome.
This is very well done. You wrote a tight little story that pulled me in. The cut to Mom’s vision is a nice touch. Hope you’re going to pursue this. Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-by
Thanks for stopping by…honestly I don’t know if i want to pursue it unless something positive comes to mind…i don’t want to end it in horror. Going over to yours now
That was altogether unpleasant. (thats a compliment) Nicely told!
Ha ha ha…Thank you, I like the compliment and completely understand that unpleasantness. Thanks for stopping by
That was sooo intense, and yeah, not pleasant, but I’ll sleep knowing mom made the ‘connection’. Whew.
LOL…yea glad that connection was made too. Thanks for stopping by
I think I preferred the poem! Just joking! Well, not really; the poem was really beautiful, and this was really terrifying. And now I’ve got the shivers. It was just too real. The writing is brilliant.
Ha ha ha…ok just let the poem stay in your mind ok…forget you read this. It’s just when I saw the picture, something about a mother dreaming came to me.
Thanks for reading both 🙂
Whoa! This jerked me awake in the early morning! Well told. Hope unspeakable things are done to Uncle Tim.
http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/mothers-gift.html
Thank you, just stopped by yours and WOW…very very well done.
Lady D and I are too old to read this stuff. It scared me. I hate that stuff, Boomie. It’s brilliantly done, but I still hate it. I’m not generally afraid of anything, but that creepy stuff gets me! 🙂 And, you’re so damn good at telling it too. This flash fiction thing … you got it down good. I’m smiling. 🙂 BUT, I’m gonna’ stick to the wonderful poetry if you don’t mind. 😉
Ha ha ha, your comment got me cracking up…thank you ever so much. 🙂
Has it been this long that I’ve been away? June 16, it was! What I been meaning to tell you is that I figured out who this reminds me of. Have you read Nora Zeale Hurston’s (sp) novel, “The Bluest Eye”? She does precisely what you do here. Like Hurston, you have that ability to force us to look into the dark heart. A very few writers can effectively and credibly write about the existence of such evil. We don’t want to acknowledge it, much less have to face it. You do it so well. Interesting. There is some extraordinary poetry between this post and your last. You only get better, Boomie.
Thank you so much, i sure have to check the book out. Never heard of her :). Great to “see” you here. Have a great month of july. Thanks always and big hugs