Jul9

Lost Hope- Poetry Prompt Reason2Rhyme

Posted on July 9, 2012 by boomiebol

kbnelson’s Poetry Prompt… Monday, July 9, 2012 Reason 2 Rhyme – “2+2=Poem”

Choose a poetry form that involves some kind of number requirement (a 5-7-5 syllable haiku, a Shakespearean sonnet with 14 lines/10 syllables per line, a couplet form with rhymed endings, a quatrain, or any other form where you must take numbers into account). Write on any topic of your choice, but be sure to pause and appreciate – or denigrate – the use of numbers in a poem!

I almost skipped this challenge…but since I am learning new things and trying to be better at this…I am giving this a shot. I encourage you to try this if you like. My take on this is a Tanka, a Japanese form of poetry with 5 lines and syllable counts 5-7-5-7-7. I wrote that like I know what I am talking about…No I don’t…Thank God for dictionaries :). Poetry experts, please feel free to critique and analyze this(be kind about it). This is my first attempt at this form. Let’s hope it is not my last. Thank you!!! This is LOST HOPE.

Image courtesy of http://www.natures-desktop-hd.com

On the blue beaches
Of the island Tahiti
I saw my lost love
Arm in arm with another
Hope for a second chance lost

* In other news…I still cannot post comments on your posts and blogs. WP is sending my comments to your spam box…I will keep commenting if I have anything to say…please feel free to check your spam box. I know I made comments on a few posts yesterday and on Saturday, and if anyone knows how I can rectify this, please let me know. Many thanks as always for all love and support. Have a lovely week*

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Dakshi on July 9, 2012 at 8:13 am said:

😦

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 8:14 am said:
  
  Yea sad…the poem right? or i missed the tanka form
  
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RoSy on July 9, 2012 at 8:45 am said:

Great job Boomie! I will have to try Tanka too.
Sad face though on the topic. We’ll have to find him/her someone better!

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:25 pm said:
  
  Yea we will have to. It was the first thing that popped in my head…suppressed memories perhaps LOL. You should especially since you are so good with HAIKU :).
  
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shafiqah1 on July 9, 2012 at 8:54 am said:

Reblogged this on shafiqah1 and commented:
Let’s all try this sometime today or tonight, sounds like fun 😀

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:18 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much
  
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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:23 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much. I commented on your Tanka post earlier but i tihnk WP sent it to spam. I appreciate this reblog
  
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stuff I said on July 9, 2012 at 10:53 am said:

Way to go with your bad self! A topic most of us can relate too..sadly. 😉

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:06 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much :). My bad self sure tries lol. Yea, unfortunately
  
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Madame Weebles on July 9, 2012 at 11:05 am said:

That poem really did break my heart.

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:05 pm said:
  
  Ouch!!! Unfortunate sometimes the scenario can be reality. Thanks Madam Weebles
  
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Bunmi on July 9, 2012 at 11:32 am said:

How sad! But I liked it. 🙂

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:04 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much Bunmi :). Great to “see” you here, i appreciate this
  
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gladiuspoeticus on July 9, 2012 at 2:13 pm said:

Great tanka, Boomie! thanks for following me so closely with your loving attention. Forget about that guy on the beach, you have better things coming.

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:15 pm said:
  
  Lol…thank you. It was the only thing that came to my mind. I appreciate your work…it always reads smoothly. Thanks always for stopping by as well.
  
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Oster's Mom on July 9, 2012 at 2:32 pm said:

Heartbreaking!

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 2:36 pm said:
  
  How cool, i just left a comment on your post :). Yea…i wish i came up with something else but it was the first thing that popped in my mind
  
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  - Oster's Mom on July 9, 2012 at 2:41 pm said:
    
    Sweet! It’s impressive how your creativity comes out so quickly.
StetotheJ on July 9, 2012 at 4:14 pm said:

I love how, you break things down so simply yet keep the emotional power flowing through it.

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 4:16 pm said:
  
  Thanks so much for saying that. i often feel that my words are too simple and so they don’t carry enough depth. Unfortunately it’s the only way i know how to write…I can’t do deep metaphors for the life of me :). Glad you said this :). Thanks
  
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  - StetotheJ on July 9, 2012 at 4:18 pm said:
    
    Depth comes from peoples experiences and imagination, how people see your words is different to your view and I like what I see as do a lot of others I see.
  - boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 4:19 pm said:
    
    Fine explanation :). Thank you!!!
silentlyheardonce on July 9, 2012 at 6:52 pm said:

WP is sending everyone to spam. Someone said everyone needs to go into their spam and click on not spam and it should correct itself. Crazy you get emails saying you don’t have a lot of traffic and when you get a lot they spam you. SMH

Your poem is good I’m going to try and do one.

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 6:59 pm said:
  
  So annoying lol. I emailed support, and I am able to post comments again.
  
  Yes you should. These challenges help me improve and learn more about writing. Thanks so much :).
  
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StacyMichelle on July 9, 2012 at 7:56 pm said:

nicely done. I love how you are embracing challenges, it’s fun to watch (& read)

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 8:43 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much. They sure are helping me to improve my writing skills, and be more rounded 🙂
  
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GianCarlo ｡(◕‿◕)｡TheDaydreamer on July 9, 2012 at 9:45 pm said:

Aww that hurts! 😦

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- boomiebol on July 9, 2012 at 9:47 pm said:
  
  I know 😦
  
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readinpleasure on July 11, 2012 at 9:54 am said:

You know until I started blogging I had never heard of haiku and and now tanka. You and Rosy are the ones who have written tanka). I think this is lovely, Boomie. Kudos!

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- boomiebol on July 11, 2012 at 5:21 pm said:
  
  Same here. It’s one of the reasons why i am really enjoying this. I am learning new things everyday and that is good by me :). Thank you!!!
  
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Madhu on July 11, 2012 at 12:26 pm said:

Sad but beautiful! My comment problems seem to have sorted themselves out! Perhaps yours will as well 🙂

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- boomiebol on July 11, 2012 at 5:17 pm said:
  
  Oh great, mine as well :).
  
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kbnelson on July 12, 2012 at 7:14 am said:

I really loved the way everyone this week turned the numbers challenge into their own favorite poetry form (or tried a new one!) Great job, and I thought you captured the emotion of that moment perfectly.

(Also, I checked my spam folder and “un-spammed” the comment that got sent there. Hopefully, you’ll be able to continue commenting. I’ll keep checking it!)

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- boomiebol on July 12, 2012 at 7:50 am said:
  
  Thank you so much Karen. I think it is working fine now, but i would still check spam from time to time :). I almost didn’t do the challenge but glad i did and learnt something new.
  
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- boomiebol on July 14, 2012 at 11:42 am said:
  
  Thank you 🙂
  
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