Chidinma- Friday Fictioneers 8/17

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It’s that time again to get the creative juices flowing, courtesy of Madison Wood’s prompt. This week’s photo is courtesy of Lura Helms, thanks Lura, and many thanks to Madison for always setting this up.

This week, I came up with a story, pure work of fiction. As always feel free to participate, comments, honest and kind critiques are welcome. THANK YOU!

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Chidinma kept running…they were following her no doubt.

Ever since the village priestess had told her husband she was carrying twins, plans were been made to banish her “evil” seeds once they were born.

In Umuofia, twins were an abomination…

Chidinma kept running…if she could find that old tree mama had taken her when she was five…the tree where her Chi dwelt, they would save her.

Still running fast she stumbled to the ground…tears blinding her as she looked up…right in front of her was the tree.

Chidinma remembered what mama did here several years ago…she got into character, and started to evoke her Chi in Igbo “Onye kwe chi ya ekwe…”

Five minutes later, over Umuofia thunder blazed like fire across the skies…

AUTHOR’S NOTES:
Igbo language is spoken by the Igbo people an ethnic group in the southeastern Nigeria
Chidinma is a unisex name meaning God is great.
Chi is a person’s spiritual guide or god
“Onye kwe chi ya ekwe…” means “whoever believeth, achieveth”

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    • Thank you Madhu, and I have to agree. Back in those days a lot of strange things happened, and i think they still continue to happen…so many myths, rules, ideologies and such

      • WOW! How unfair, i know some parts of NIgeria too they often want male children and if the “woman” cannot produce them, the husband can take in another wife…like it’s the woman’s chromosomes that dictates gender…such a shame.

      • Very shameful….even in some educated and supposed “literate” NIgerian families…the male child thingy is such a big deal.

  1. Good story depicting the horror of superstition. I like “onye kwe chi ya ekwe”. I looked up the pronunciation on Omniglot.com but am not sure about the “e” and the “i”. Any clues?

    • Thank you so much, very glad you enjoyed this. I am not ibo (igbo) but i know often the “e” sound out as “a” and the “i” like e. I am yoruba another ethnicity in Nigeria but have many ibo (igbo) friends.

      Very nice of you to look up the pronunciation.

    • I agree, sometimes i think ignorance mixed with pride all hiding under the cloak of culture and law can be a terrible thing.

      Thank you Lily. Enjoyed this morning’s post

  2. Boomie, I was carried away so, real hooked, beause the suspense is good and great. Maybe you should develop this further. I love the little bit of igbo sprinkled into the narrative. They give the story authenticity and African cultural flavour. Well done, sister. Not sure I wil be in this time too, I’m hot, but I will see what I can do by tomotrrow

  3. It’s nice to get an insight on another culture, great visual descriptions as well. One thing, I’m not sure whehter there’s a space between ‘dwelt,they’.

    • As i wish i could meet you Soma. Wishes come true, so I will keep my fingers crossed, praying our paths do cross :). Thank you so much, I am humbled by this kind comment. You know how i feel about your work.

      Thank you

  4. There’s a wonderful connection there. Boomie. It crosses cultures, it identifies the taboo and the belief system in a culture by the manner in which you so vividly portray the setting and the scene taking place. I agree this could be more than just a few paragraphs. Your words set the stage for something powerful to happen. Excellent.

    • Thank you so much Penny. I appreciate this comment, i often am afraid of writing long stories for fear they might get too wordy or i might run of out ideas…i will see what i can do with this one. I think I have a few ideas floating around :). Have a lovely friday and weekend

  5. Enjoyed this journey into another culture and appreciated your inclusion of notes to help me navigate. Interesting how stories can be so different depending on setting, culture, etc., and still so similar at their root. Reaffirms, in my mind, the connection that all people have. Thanks!

  6. Very powerful – it creates a strong feeling of tension and connection to the character immediately. Thank you for the additional explanations as well – I learned new things from that.

  7. Hi Bommie…Thank you for this powerful story. Also for including the terms at the end. I read somewhere recently that in some parts of the world, twins are (were) considered evil, a bad omen and mothers were forced to secretly kill one of them at birth. What a horrible choice to make. Of course, we all know about the girl babies in India. Now they are importing young girls from other countries as brides for all their young men.
    I’m #30 on the list.

  8. Nicely done! It’s a small world because I had dinner last night with someone whose family is Igbo. This is a great story, with a really authentic feel – and your main character’s panic / fear really comes through.

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